Drake 53 Posted April 23, 2003 Here's a thought that might please everybody...leave out the main governments and instead have a joint-nation mercenary-type task force that's hired to take out the ship. Ooooh...perhaps none of the armies can do it because the alien ship surrounds itself by an electro-magnetic pulse field which disables all electronics. Just a thought... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy 60 Posted April 25, 2003 Changes in italics The Version With A Bit More Development Starts off with caption like "Earth, 1660 AD" and you see the Earth from space, as a huge alien spacecraft spins out of control towards the planet. The camera follows it as it crashes and gets buried underground by the force of it's collision. The scene fades into present day, and we see a city in the distance, quite far from where the spacecraft is. Some people could be digging for oil or something, when they hit a solid metal structure underground. They call out an excavation team to find out what it is, but they soon realise it is a bit more than an obstruction. The ship "wakes" and rises out of the ground, seemingly unaware that its crew is all dead, and automatically kills everyone nearby, and heads towards the city. The military is called in to try to stop it, as it starts attacking the city. Trying to find a weakness, they get in close and fire various weapons at certain places on the ships hull. The ship, however, fights back, and destroys all the military there, but one truck, driven by two of the main characters. As they drive away, laser blasts and rockets are following and exploding behind them. Then they come to a drop in the terrain and crash, leaping from the vehicle, just as it is destroyed. They then run into a conveniently placed cave or something. Eventually they decide that the only way they will stop it is is to get inside it and somehow disable its power source. As the team explore the craft they see decomposed alien bodies, and look for a way to stop the ship. Twelve to fifteen start the mission, and they are stalked by alien things, and get caught by the ship's own attempts to stop them. They split into two groups and one heads off to find the power generator, and the other tries to find a control room. After a few gruesome deaths and tragedies, they finally set up a timed explosive charge to destroy the power generator when they think they have found it, and make their way outside, signal the military to get them, and fly away, just as the bombs explode. The ship, now disabled, crashes back down to the ground, or maybe into the sea if it happens to be right next to the city, maybe knocking the tops off a few skyscrapers, just for fun. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Drake 53 Posted April 25, 2003 *nods* One quick fix you need...it starts off with the two main characters getting in but then suddenly there's a large group. You should probably write in how the other people got there. Maybe cryo-froze test subjects that the aliens captured back in 1600-ish. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy 60 Posted April 25, 2003 Hmm... *explodes* Damn... Thought too hard. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy 60 Posted April 25, 2003 The Extra Specially Enhanced Version Starts off with caption like "Earth, 1660 AD" and you see the Earth from space, as a huge alien spacecraft spins out of control towards the planet. The camera follows it as it crashes and gets buried underground by the force of it's collision. The scene fades into present day, and we see a city in the distance, quite far from where the spacecraft is. Some people could be digging for oil or something, when they hit a solid metal structure underground. They call out an excavation team to find out what it is, but they soon realise it is a bit more than an obstruction. The ship "wakes" and rises out of the ground, seemingly unaware that its crew is all dead, and automatically kills everyone nearby, and heads towards the city. The military is called in to try to stop it, as it starts attacking the city. Trying to find a weakness, they get in close and fire various weapons at certain places on the ships hull. The ship, however, fights back, and destroys all the military there, but one truck, driven by two of the main characters. As they drive away, laser blasts and rockets are following and exploding behind them. Then they come to a drop in the terrain and crash, leaping from the vehicle, just as it is destroyed. They then run into a conveniently placed cave or something. Eventually they decide that the only way they will stop it is is to get inside it and somehow disable its power source. As the team explore the craft they see decomposed alien bodies, and look for a way to stop the ship. The two main characters lead the mission with a few miscellaneous people joining in, and they are stalked by alien things, and get caught by the ship's own attempts to stop them. They find a cryogenics lab, with rows of pods with people captured in the past, all frozen in time, and wake some of them. Some just go hysterical and die, but a few survive and join the mission, as weird as that sounds. They split into two groups and one heads off to find the power generator, and the other tries to find a control room. The group that finds the control room figures out how to change its course, and they direct it away from the city, but can?t figure out much else of the controls. After a few gruesome deaths and tragedies, they finally set up a timed explosive charge to destroy the power generator when they think they have found it, and make their way outside, signal the military to get them, and fly away, just as the bombs explode. The ship, now disabled, crashes back down to the ground, or maybe into the sea, if it happens to be there. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy 60 Posted May 2, 2003 I suppose it might be an idea to try and invent the characters... lol Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
E-wing 3 Posted May 2, 2003 How about this: There are these guys working in an advanced military technology type lab, testing new weapons and such, when they accidently discover some secret project to create cyborg warrior thingies. Then the lab sends troops with these new futuristic weapons after them, and maybe some of the cyborg monster guys too! It came to me in a dream! been there, done that....... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
E-wing 3 Posted May 2, 2003 if your looking for an organl idea....... i can't help you...... i'm a wright too and i never give out my story ideas on prisable if your trying to right a fan fic moive....... then how about: [glow=cyan:3668cf386b]Psychopathic Jedi The Moive: When The Force Goes Pop![/glow:3668cf386b] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy 60 Posted May 2, 2003 How about this: There are these guys working in an advanced military technology type lab, testing new weapons and such, when they accidently discover some secret project to create cyborg warrior thingies. Then the lab sends troops with these new futuristic weapons after them, and maybe some of the cyborg monster guys too! It came to me in a dream! been there, done that....... Yeah, I ditched that idea about half an hour after I posted it. lol Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
E-wing 3 Posted May 2, 2003 if your looking for an organl idea....... i can't help you...... i'm a wright too and i never give out my story ideas on prisable if your trying to right a fan fic moive....... then how about: [glow=cyan:8407ccd774]Psychopathic Jedi The Moive: When The Force Goes Pop![/glow:8407ccd774] posable plot line: The NJO loyelest are seeking to destory all the old star wars characters....... and those who love them. Can the crazy and offen dangerest members of the PJ band together to stop them before the star wars they know and love is gone forever? Will there determantion, powers, and comic prat fall be enought to win? Find out in this years greatest Sci-fi comaty! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Princess 35 Posted May 2, 2003 Oooo that's a good one. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Drake 53 Posted May 2, 2003 But what about those who love NJO more than the rest of the EU? Like me? I say stick with the crazy, alien, psycho, killing, space dealy. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
E-wing 3 Posted May 2, 2003 i didn't think you were a PJ, Drake. so you wouldn't even be in the moive and anyway....... one of the resons pod started the PJ is she was tired of the dark turn the NJO took...... i think it be fiting to fight them also i point out that we'd be fighting the fanatic part of the NJO who believe all the old star wars characters need to be destroyed...... to make way for the new evil ones Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Drake 53 Posted May 2, 2003 I wasn't for the first story...I am now though. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andy 60 Posted May 2, 2003 But what about those who love NJO more than the rest of the EU? Like me? And me. [Edit: Oh Emperor type one, I fixed your coding for you~Princess] [Edit: If I did it wrong, it was on purpose! Maybe...] Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
E-wing 3 Posted May 3, 2003 fine....... maybe you don't like the plot line..... but it was only an idea..... what you think of the JP moive itself? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
E-wing 3 Posted May 3, 2003 I had the greatest idea last night! [glow=cyan:b0240a388e]Jedi Punks The Moive: The Nudists Strike Back![/glow:b0240a388e] The Jedi Punks band has spilt up and gone there own ways. The galaxy is in a state of pease and mello music. But all is not right. In a training acsadent Luke Skywalker hits his head and loses what little sanaty he has left. He is now: Darth Nudity. With his battle station, The Nude Star, he now traves the galaxy tranforming whole planets into nudist colonies. But there is hope...... those tranformed by the Nude Star's Naked Super Lazer are vonrable to loud music. Can the Jedi Punks reunite and save the galaxy or will they be just another story for "Behind the Intersteler Music" ? soooooooo....... what dose everyone think? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
chozen 1 Posted May 3, 2003 Yeah! I like it. Sounds like a low budget sci-fi porn film. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Pandora 77 Posted May 3, 2003 I like the idea but there are two problems. One, we'd have to make it entirely spoof, which means changing names, places, and all that jazz, and get written consent from any company or organization that we allude to, otherwise it's copyright infringement, and we'll get sued for all we're worth and more. Two, it's a very controversial subject, which means that it could only be a private film, unless we all want angry mobs throwing picket signs at us for the rest of our lives. I like the idea if we were going to make a straight-up comedy. Besides, who doesn't like spoofs? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
chozen 1 Posted May 3, 2003 And it sounds like a porno film. Which will attract attention from the older male audiences. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Pandora 77 Posted May 3, 2003 *smacks her head on her desk* Go read the Punks, Chozen. Just go read it and you'll understand what he's talking about... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
chozen 1 Posted May 3, 2003 Ahh but admit it, it does. I?m thinking from an audience point of view. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
chozen 1 Posted May 3, 2003 Ok i'll go read it....*heads off to fan fiction* :( Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Princess 35 Posted May 3, 2003 Chozen you're going to have to go to SW.com to get the full text of it and then the end of it is here. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
chozen 1 Posted May 3, 2003 Great They've probably deleted it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
